Episode 2 of Venus Versus Virus…
Torrent | DDL
Noticeable improvement over the first episode. Keep at it guys. Looking forward to Gin-iro.
A rather good release and an improvement over the previous episode, but there were still some grammar errors. For starters, some corrections for the opening:
*I felt a sad voice saying “save me from the darkness”
*No one believes it, but I want to save them [although I feel that “you” is more suitable than “them” in this case, that’s up to you]
*The color of sin [wasn’t really an error, but this sounds better]
*Romaji correction: Minagete, not minakerya
*”Save me from the darkness” was my scream
Also, I think the last line would be better off as “I waver; Bravin’ my heart” for the sole reason that messing with Engrish makes me sad.
Hope this was any help. Keep it up!